Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

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Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2017 7:03 pm



Hey guys, I've had a few ideas for battery writing in my head the last few days,so I decided to write them down in Musescore and put a recording up for everyone. Please, I'll take all the feedback/criticism I can get on my writing, let me know what you think, and I hope you enjoy it!

https://soundcloud.com/kenny-sper/batte ... ct-16-2017
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Re: Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2017 9:37 am



I like a lot of what I hear, I'd appreciate it if you could post the music as well, just so I can see stickings and stuff like that. The ending sounded a little awkward with the shot tap flam for the snares, maybe change the last note to a man shot or something like that
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Re: Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2017 11:45 am



Thanks! And yeah, to be honest I'm really not completely happy with the ending either. I'll put up the sheets as soon as I can.
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2014- "NOLA" Xylophone
2015- "Latin Jazz" Xylophone
2016- "Circus du Soleil: Quidam" Center Marimba
2017- "The Journey Within" Center Snare

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Re: Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Fri Oct 20, 2017 12:01 pm



As stated above, it'll be much better to get an idea for your writing once the sheet music is on the table (MuseScore's virtual instruments aren't the prettiest... haha). From what I hear, though I appreciate the fluency of the writing. If you took your writing and added some artful dynamic contrast, you're on your way to something solid. That being said, I look forward to you posting what you wrote.

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Re: Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Tue Dec 05, 2017 12:20 pm



Shoot, I totally forgot to upload the PDF. I'll have that uploaded by the end of the week... I hope
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2014- "NOLA" Xylophone
2015- "Latin Jazz" Xylophone
2016- "Circus du Soleil: Quidam" Center Marimba
2017- "The Journey Within" Center Snare

John I. Leonard High School (Indoor Partners)
2018- "Diamonds in the Rough" Snare


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Re: Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Wed Jan 24, 2018 5:45 pm



GUESS WHAT. 4 months later, I finally got around to exporting that snare part... Lol. So Eric, Dave, here ya go! :lol: *edit* Musescore is really bad at ninelets. Ignore that stupid thing it did at the end of that, it's just a normal 9 lol
Battery_Ideas_Oct._16_2017-Snare.pdf
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Palm Beach Gardens High School
2014- "NOLA" Xylophone
2015- "Latin Jazz" Xylophone
2016- "Circus du Soleil: Quidam" Center Marimba
2017- "The Journey Within" Center Snare

John I. Leonard High School (Indoor Partners)
2018- "Diamonds in the Rough" Snare


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Re: Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Fri Jan 26, 2018 8:53 am



I like a lot of what I see here, one thing I think you could change is having a little bit more variation with stickings/accents in passages with a lot of similar rhythms. In particular, I see the same "r l r r L" pop up several times in there. I don't think you need to totally get rid of it all, just vary the details a little bit. For instance, in measures 10 and 11, rather than having "rlrrL rllrL rrll rlrrL rlrrL rrll" you could shuffle the stickings and move the accents a bit and get something, for example, like this: "rlrrL Rlrlr rrll rllRL rLrrl rlrl" Obviously it doesn't have to be exactly like that, but you get the idea. It adds variety and makes it just that much more interesting to listen to or to play. One other thing I'd mention, which was already said above by DaveSkittles, is having a bit more dynamic contrast, not just with accents and taps but between phrases. I see that fat forte 8th note roll into the mezzopiano triplets, and I like that, but I'd like to see some more drawn out quiet sections and some big loud sections. Just from looking at the writing I'm guessing this is meant to be played in a line setting rather than as a solo, and as my director puts it: "its always cool to see lines show range"

Other than that I don't have anything bad to say. There's a lot of very cool writing here, and for what I'm assuming is your first or one of your first attempts at writing for battery this is really good.
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Re: Battery Ideas *Please Critique*

Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2018 8:43 pm



Thanks lol. Yeah this was one of my first things I wrote. I've written a lot more since then (and you guys might see some of it later lol) and I THINK I'm improving. There's definitely more dynamics, phrasing, etc. in it now then there was in that excerpt.
Palm Beach Gardens High School
2014- "NOLA" Xylophone
2015- "Latin Jazz" Xylophone
2016- "Circus du Soleil: Quidam" Center Marimba
2017- "The Journey Within" Center Snare

John I. Leonard High School (Indoor Partners)
2018- "Diamonds in the Rough" Snare


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